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The
first episode of “After The Darkness” doesn’t have a page 99; but it does a
have page nine. So that’s where I’ll begin. If a reader began reading “After
The Darkness” at page 9 they would find everything they need to know about the
basics of the story. You have a
reluctant agent of oppression, two victims of categorization and a boss man
that’s ruthless in his commitment to inflicting suffering. That about sums it up in a nutshell.
The
opening lines of page nine sets the stage:
Percy
narrows his eyes, his disapproval hidden behind his dark shades, “No, of
course…not. Just want to get the job done and over with before the freeze,” he
justifies his hesitation. And in an effort to prove that he’s not soft, he
wrenches Mila away from Nadia. He yanks her hard; but not too hard -- just hard
enough to make his point.
Right
away we know that Percy is not too happy with the situation at hand; but he has
to hide it. Not only does he have to hide his disapproval, he needs to show a false
sense of enthusiasm for something he finds distasteful. I can’t say that I strategically planned for
this characterization to fall on page 9; but I did want to show the reader at
some point that Percy is a subversive individual. He doesn’t want to go along
with the system and he has the seeds of a rebel within.
Then
there is Nadia, the main character in this story. Page 9 makes it clear that Nadia is a rebel
and not content to simply accept her fate.
Let’s take a look at a page 9 excerpt:
“Don’t touch her!” Nadia flails about as
Thomas binds her wrists behind her back with zip ties. She strains to see her
little sister’s face and fights her own urge to sob. Instead she screams. Would
the neighbors come? Does anyone care about the horror she is facing? Unfortunately, she knows the answer is no, no
one is willing to risk themselves for others.
This
brief passage reveals Nadia’s willingness to fight back even in the face of
stronger forces and despite her sad realization of the type of world in which she
lives. But even knowing that not a
single soul will come to her aid, she screams anyway, hoping that someone --
anyone, will be willing to break the code of silence and compliance.
As a
writer, I try not to overwhelm readers with a lot back story and world building
too soon. I prefer to sprinkle a little bit of information throughout the story
and reveal the foundation of the fictional world in bits and pieces. Page 9
does this well. Even if a reader only
reads page 9, they will discover that this fictional world is freezing, that it
is a place where children can be handcuffed and carried away and that people in
this world don’t feel free to speak out against injustice or stand up for the
rights of others.
Let’s
take one final peek at another snippet of text from page 9.
“I promise,” Percy says with a smile he
only uses in his work. He would never curse his own kids with that smile --
never.
Deception
and manipulation – it’s eating Percy alive. But it is also eating away at the
society, creating tiny internal rebellions and sowing the seeds of revolution.
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